Hey Ben that's some awesome work there. On the letter you could have took put a little less half circles on there and the same with the business card but for the envelope your logo is Lind of blends in with the background you have it on because that music note looks like it's part of the logo you could probably have lighten the background behind it but other than that it's an over good business package.
Umm... there isn't much of a connection between the separate pieces aside from the color. Is bold text really readable from a distance? Its a good start but you're heading in too many directions all at once. Also i think there's something wrong with your mic in the business letter it has green yet tiny blotches of grey. As for the address in the business letter it easy to read but CMR blends with the rest rather than standing out a little more making it harder for a person to find right away. You really shouldn't have put anything around the area where the stamp is supposed to go. The music notes is a nice touch but it blends to much with your logo. I think your logo would have been fine on the right side of the address. You might want to rearrange the P/O box line so its right below CMR and above 313 View Mont. I still think you could try combing the three stripes flow on the left bottom corner mixed with the song notes morphing into a mic OR the notes flowing from the mic up towards the logo and address. The circles and lines seem a bit of an overkill on the letterhead. It doesn't connect much aside from the logo and the three tone green stripes. Its seriously not a good idea to put so many / in between info on each line. A little circle might work better. The info on the card is impossible to see its too bold bold bold!!! I can see how the circles connect with the letter head but circles don't aim at your concept of music at all. Have you consider making a more personalized handwritten typeface for the front of the card (Take one moment to own it) and balance it out with the logo by putting it in the lower right quadrant below Rap? Try incorporating the mic and music notes instead of the circles into your card or the green 3 tone stripes so it can tie it all together into one business pkg design.
Hey Ben that's some awesome work there. On the letter you could have took put a little less half circles on there and the same with the business card but for the envelope your logo is Lind of blends in with the background you have it on because that music note looks like it's part of the logo you could probably have lighten the background behind it but other than that it's an over good business package.
ReplyDeleteUmm... there isn't much of a connection between the separate pieces aside from the color. Is bold text really readable from a distance? Its a good start but you're heading in too many directions all at once. Also i think there's something wrong with your mic in the business letter it has green yet tiny blotches of grey. As for the address in the business letter it easy to read but CMR blends with the rest rather than standing out a little more making it harder for a person to find right away. You really shouldn't have put anything around the area where the stamp is supposed to go. The music notes is a nice touch but it blends to much with your logo. I think your logo would have been fine on the right side of the address. You might want to rearrange the P/O box line so its right below CMR and above 313 View Mont. I still think you could try combing the three stripes flow on the left bottom corner mixed with the song notes morphing into a mic OR the notes flowing from the mic up towards the logo and address.
ReplyDeleteThe circles and lines seem a bit of an overkill on the letterhead. It doesn't connect much aside from the logo and the three tone green stripes. Its seriously not a good idea to put so many / in between info on each line. A little circle might work better.
The info on the card is impossible to see its too bold bold bold!!! I can see how the circles connect with the letter head but circles don't aim at your concept of music at all. Have you consider making a more personalized handwritten typeface for the front of the card (Take one moment to own it) and balance it out with the logo by putting it in the lower right quadrant below Rap? Try incorporating the mic and music notes instead of the circles into your card or the green 3 tone stripes so it can tie it all together into one business pkg design.